Okay.
1.) "GREAT STUFF!" I always stalk the "Creative Writing" area, so I can read the next chapter before the Freerunner hits my inbox with it.
2.) Chapter 11 was by far the most easily-imagined, while reading. I could see how everything would look if it were a movie/video, and I think that's awesome. I hope you keep up the good work, Gabe, and of course, continue to increase your skills as a writer.