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RISE - A Parkour Story
« on: October 14, 2009, 05:19:31 PM »
Well it's been eight months and seven chapters now and the story rages on. As both a writer and a practitioner I am always striving to make my work as good as possible. I can get instant feedback when training from my fellow runners or when I do a movement wrong. But with writing it's a little tougher haha. I've heard from some people but I want to hear from everyone I can. So...

What does everyone think so far? Do you like the story? Hate it? See room for improvement, and if so, where? Just want to speculate on where the story goes next? Anything at all about RISE, feel free to say it here. 

EDIT: Thanks for the linkage Zac!
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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #1 on: October 14, 2009, 07:03:31 PM »
Also, for anyone who needs to catch up, you can check out the old issues on www.TheFreerunner.net, or on the APK Creative Writing archives

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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #2 on: October 15, 2009, 10:44:40 AM »
Gabe,  I am soo hooked on "Rise" !  I'm not even going to pretend like I don't gloat at my special privilege of reading it before everyone else. :)

Keep writing!
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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #3 on: October 15, 2009, 11:40:40 AM »
Didn't catch this thread until now! Yeah, amazing read. Can't wait for more!

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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #4 on: October 15, 2009, 12:43:47 PM »
I LOVE Rise!! Everytime i see you online i check to see if the new chapter is out, im so hooked!
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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #5 on: October 15, 2009, 02:39:14 PM »
Hi Gabe. I started reading Rise, and it's quite a good story! Would it be ok if I did a thorough critique of the chapters and posted it in this thread? It would take up quite a bit of space but who knows, I might be useful (or not)  ;D
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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #6 on: October 15, 2009, 03:16:05 PM »
I second what everyone said. Rise is such a great story I'm sure we can all connect with. I've had times where I've been so tired I couldn't go on, but I did anyway. And the satisfaction was perfectly matched with your story. Keep it up, dude!
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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #7 on: October 15, 2009, 05:08:45 PM »
Hi Gabe. I started reading Rise, and it's quite a good story! Would it be ok if I did a thorough critique of the chapters and posted it in this thread? It would take up quite a bit of space but who knows, I might be useful (or not)  ;D

Go right ahead. And be as biting as you like haha. I like harsh criticism, sugar coated words don't have enough impact to make me change. (But leave out stuff about typos, like missing an 's' or an extra the or something. I notice those the instant the chapters get published online and I smack my forehead for missing the obvious ones)

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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #8 on: October 16, 2009, 09:23:33 PM »
Gabe, Rise is awesome. Please please PLEASE keep it going!!! I IS ALSO HOOKEDED!
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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #9 on: October 17, 2009, 03:45:55 AM »
I love this story and I look forward to it every month. I have to say you are a amazing writer and I hope you keep this story alive and when it does come to a end one day I hope that you make another story so I may continue reading your amazing work.

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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #10 on: October 20, 2009, 04:06:45 PM »
I think when your finished you should publish it. :) And then maybe write another parkour novel. I would definatly buy it.

Your story is why I look foward to the freerunner. :)

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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #11 on: October 20, 2009, 06:06:59 PM »
Please please please Gabe, try and stick with this storyline for a long time. You have so much stuff to work with, so i'd like to see you squeez every single word you can for Rise.

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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #12 on: October 22, 2009, 01:13:49 PM »
I think when your finished you should publish it. :) And then maybe write another parkour novel. I would definatly buy it.

Your story is why I look foward to the freerunner. :)

That is the reason i look forward to every new edition of the freerunner also!

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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #13 on: October 24, 2009, 12:48:29 PM »
Anybody have anything they'd like to see? (Besides Lee getting knocked out haha)

Any speculations about the future of the story?

By the way, I'm thinking of having a "Christmas Special" sort of side story for December. Any ideas for that?

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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #14 on: October 24, 2009, 06:44:13 PM »
My brain is sooooo dead right now, so I'm lacking creative ideas haha. But I did want to let you know that I love your writing man, it's so inspirational and it's something I can really connect with. Keep up the AMAZING work dude!!!!
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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #15 on: October 24, 2009, 07:35:14 PM »
I want to see Owen and Rusty really bond at some point. Of course, this is your story. I think its better that we don't make requests, your doing a fine job on your own ;)

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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #16 on: October 29, 2009, 07:05:17 PM »
ummm i have to say that Rise is probably the best story that i have read in a very, very long time. im totally stoked every month to see it come out. it actually makes my day to see it come out and read it ^^. i think that you should publish it for sure lol it would be great and i would buy it for sure. anyway keep up the good work and i think it would be great for lee to take one in the face XD anyway keep it up dude the story actually inspires me

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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #17 on: November 02, 2009, 04:18:50 PM »
I want to see new chapters everyday  ;D  :P
Im lovin it!
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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #18 on: November 02, 2009, 04:58:34 PM »
I love your story. Everytime I begin reading a chapter I actually start to get closer to the screen like its some movie or YouTube video. Your a amazing write and I think you should publish this. Love the story.

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Re: RISE - A Parkour Story
« Reply #19 on: November 20, 2009, 08:29:29 PM »
Rise is = to if not greater than awesome
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